Upon turning in my first draft I was questioning whether I had written a good paper. After receiving the different suggestions and proposed revisions and putting them into effect, my view has changed. I now feel I have written a very sound and well put-together essay. Most of the corrections that I made to my drafts had to do with elaboration. Whether it was elaborating on the argument that the space was making or just going into more detail about the colors used or what sort of things are on the walls. By making these changes I feel the paper is easier to keep up with and get a better idea of what its like to sit inside the restaurant.
By completing this final draft, it almost feels like a weight has been lifted off my shoulders. Not that this was a painful task but finishing a writing assignment is always a gratifying thing. This one in particular has been especially gratifying to finish because of the type of assignment, I've never had to write a paper on spacial analysis. Overall I feel it was a satisfying experience and a big change from the normal writing assignment.
Monday, February 16, 2009
Tuesday, February 10, 2009
Draft 1 Revisions
After looking at both the revisions two of my classmates made I have reevaluated my first draft in a few different ways.
One very good suggestion I received was about the tense of my essay. In some portions of my essay I often changed from first person to second person. By doing this I realized that it may cause some confusion with the readers and how these thoughts came about. I have changed all of these parts as best I could and feel that the essay has improved a lot just by making these alterations.
Another helpful change that was offered by the revisions was about the structure of my arguments and finding while visiting my space. One of people that revised my paper gave many suggestion in how separate sentences or rearrange my ideas to give a clearer picture of whats going on or explain something better. By separating some of the paragraphs I can even lengthen my paper.
One very good suggestion I received was about the tense of my essay. In some portions of my essay I often changed from first person to second person. By doing this I realized that it may cause some confusion with the readers and how these thoughts came about. I have changed all of these parts as best I could and feel that the essay has improved a lot just by making these alterations.
Another helpful change that was offered by the revisions was about the structure of my arguments and finding while visiting my space. One of people that revised my paper gave many suggestion in how separate sentences or rearrange my ideas to give a clearer picture of whats going on or explain something better. By separating some of the paragraphs I can even lengthen my paper.
Monday, February 9, 2009
Author's Note
I have currently finished the first draft of my essay. After completing it I reviewed it and one thing I liked about the assignment and the essay itself was the freedom it allowed in writing it. I could tell how I felt about a particular event and how it was shown or effected others. I would like to know what topics I should elaborate more on or add to the paper and if there are any errors either in the form of the paper or grammatical ones that can be fixed.
Wednesday, February 4, 2009
Meaning to Community
While observing Dutch's I got the feel of what types of customers they brought in and why they came to this particular place. It has a friendly environment that many people love. This causes many families to go there as a nice homely place where the employees are nice, the food is good, and the prices aren't bad at all. It also appeals to the students at TCU for being a place to hang out with friends and get a cheap meal, which is something every college student looks for.
Tuesday, February 3, 2009
Observation Notes
On the few trips I made to Dutch's there were some things that caught my eye:
Arrangement of Furniture and Chairs:
There were more chairs located in the center on the restaurant. May suggest that they want more people to sit in the center and close to the ordering counter. This may be to encourage customers to purchase more food.
Drink Station:
Along with the soda dispensers there were two machines from which you could get tea. On the left was the unsweetened and on the right was the sweetened. The two were identical in look except for one major detail; the sweet tea machine had a flashy, enticing sticker on the front of it. This might show that sweet tea is more exciting and customers should choose that particular drink.
Room Separation:
Another thing I noticed was the separation of each room. Although there are no doors between sections of the restaurant there was a division of the whole place. When you walk in, the first thing you see is the bar with barstools, some two-person tables, and a single booth in the first section of Dutch's. In the second section, which is directly connected to the area where you order and separated by a wall from the first section, is filled with four-person tables and includes the drink machines. The third section is separated similarly from the middle and has fewer chairs.
Maximum Occupancy Sign:
There was a maximum occupancy sign on the wall which can be seen as an argument of definition of what the legal number of people are allowed in the building when talking about the fire codes.
Welcoming to All Ages:
Like all restaurants all ages are welcome but in some restaurants they frown upon the typical young kids who like to be loud and have fun. At Dutch’s it is a loud environment that has a family feel to it, which would encourage families to go there.
Arrangement of Furniture and Chairs:
There were more chairs located in the center on the restaurant. May suggest that they want more people to sit in the center and close to the ordering counter. This may be to encourage customers to purchase more food.
Drink Station:
Along with the soda dispensers there were two machines from which you could get tea. On the left was the unsweetened and on the right was the sweetened. The two were identical in look except for one major detail; the sweet tea machine had a flashy, enticing sticker on the front of it. This might show that sweet tea is more exciting and customers should choose that particular drink.
Room Separation:
Another thing I noticed was the separation of each room. Although there are no doors between sections of the restaurant there was a division of the whole place. When you walk in, the first thing you see is the bar with barstools, some two-person tables, and a single booth in the first section of Dutch's. In the second section, which is directly connected to the area where you order and separated by a wall from the first section, is filled with four-person tables and includes the drink machines. The third section is separated similarly from the middle and has fewer chairs.
Maximum Occupancy Sign:
There was a maximum occupancy sign on the wall which can be seen as an argument of definition of what the legal number of people are allowed in the building when talking about the fire codes.
Welcoming to All Ages:
Like all restaurants all ages are welcome but in some restaurants they frown upon the typical young kids who like to be loud and have fun. At Dutch’s it is a loud environment that has a family feel to it, which would encourage families to go there.
Monday, February 2, 2009
Argumments of Definition
When observing Dutch's one of the main arguments of definition is the menu and its prices. Most of the food is reasonably priced, as long as you are not placing an order for two or three things from the menu. By having these reasonably priced items on the menu it allows for all different kinds of people with all different sorts of income and it will still be feasible.
Observations- Part 2
On both my trips to Dutch's to view the environment my initial hunches were close to how the place felt in person. While I was there i noticed many different things that could be turned into arguments.
One arguments that could be made had to do with the drink area. Along with the soda dispensers there were two machines from which you could get tea from. On the left was the unsweetened and on the right was the sweetened. The two were identical in look except for one major detail, the sweet tea machine had a flashy, enticing sticker on the front of it. This might show that sweet tea is more exciting and customers should choose that particular drink.
Another thing I noticed was the separation of each room. Although there are no doors between sections of the restaurant there was a division of the whole place. When you walk in, the first thing you see is the bar with barstools, some two-person tables, and a single booth in the first section of Dutch's. In the second section, which is directly connected to the area where you order and separated by a wall from the first section, is filled with four-person tables and includes the drink machines. The third section is separated similarly from the middle and has less chairs. This causes me to think that they are wanting more people to sit in the main section.
One arguments that could be made had to do with the drink area. Along with the soda dispensers there were two machines from which you could get tea from. On the left was the unsweetened and on the right was the sweetened. The two were identical in look except for one major detail, the sweet tea machine had a flashy, enticing sticker on the front of it. This might show that sweet tea is more exciting and customers should choose that particular drink.
Another thing I noticed was the separation of each room. Although there are no doors between sections of the restaurant there was a division of the whole place. When you walk in, the first thing you see is the bar with barstools, some two-person tables, and a single booth in the first section of Dutch's. In the second section, which is directly connected to the area where you order and separated by a wall from the first section, is filled with four-person tables and includes the drink machines. The third section is separated similarly from the middle and has less chairs. This causes me to think that they are wanting more people to sit in the main section.
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