Uni 2 First Draft Author's Note

When writing my first draft over the past week or so I have had a few problems and a few things i liked. Some of the things i had problems with mainly had to do with the rhetorical analysis in the articles and other sources. I don't feel I wrote enough on that, rather I feel I focused more on telling what each writer had to say on the topic. So far I think this is a decent draft but I think it could be longer and probably needs some grammatical work. I also want to make sure I did each of my MLA cites correctly.